tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2126113378990982419.post5392898920052604282..comments2011-12-06T09:55:02.639-08:00Comments on Nausheen Manji's English Language Virtual Class: The Haunting by CheckersNausheen Manjihttp://www.blogger.com/profile/08093578164782148162noreply@blogger.comBlogger4125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2126113378990982419.post-47246732081154051392011-11-13T21:32:09.417-08:002011-11-13T21:32:09.417-08:00Mmm...you have pretty much TOLD us a story. Howeve...Mmm...you have pretty much TOLD us a story. However, there is no focus on the way it is told - no focus on opening, sequencing, showing feelings, building things up....<br />Is it a short story - Yes<br />Is it The Haunting - Yes<br />Is there terror - Yes<br />Is there guilt - Yes<br />Grade stands at 4/10.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2126113378990982419.post-34065931702286232232011-11-10T12:22:26.715-08:002011-11-10T12:22:26.715-08:00what confuses me is that if the love for his wife ...what confuses me is that if the love for his wife was so great then there should have been some conflict or anxiety in deciding to cold bloodedly murder her? its not as simple as merely consulting a friend about gaining dominance over your spouse and then simply deciding to just kill them?Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2126113378990982419.post-28400096165455546652011-11-09T03:43:36.552-08:002011-11-09T03:43:36.552-08:00(continued)
POV is third person subject(continued)<br />POV is third person subjectUnknownhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12379188229665005514noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2126113378990982419.post-41279825052245381072011-11-09T03:38:13.903-08:002011-11-09T03:38:13.903-08:00The genre of this story is horror. The author'...The genre of this story is horror. The author's purpose is to show a man, Ahmed's feelings and emotions after he kills his wife, Sarah for materialistic reasons. The author is trying to depict the cynicism of Ahmed, but the characters seem detached and hard to relate with. There is no evident build up to the conflict and the fast pace makes the story lose out on the true essence of a 'haunting', thus, failing to create an impact.<br /><br />Usage of words such as ' Greed for money quelling the love he had for his wife' depict the character's desperation to get rid of his wife, but, due to the exploitation of full stop usage, short sentences do not bring the message across clearly. Terror has been well integrated and blended into the story, but guilt is hardly seen.<br />The main character seems to have a vivid personality and his motive behind the murder is lost between the subjectivity of the story.<br />The author also seems to have a hint of implausibility by using words such as 'he somehow managed to call an ambulance', which makes the logic of the story seem somewhat disconnected. <br />It also fails to trap the essence of being an engaging and edgy story; it comes across more like a list of events, rather than a fictional account.<br />There is a lack of character involvement and there seems to be no role of Sarah, the wife, which could have helped make the story more gripping.<br /><br />All in all, the language of the story is satisfactory, but there seem to be flaws in the plot.Unknownhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12379188229665005514noreply@blogger.com